Blog Criticism

I read Darlyn's nice blog about banning texting by truck and bus drivers.  After reading your blog about banning texting by truck and bus drivers, i am a bit confused.  You make some good points in your blog but it doesn't really support the main argument.  i think i know what you were trying to say but you didn't clearly translate it into paper.  I think one thing you could have added was to try and ban texting by not only truck and bus drivers but by every driver.  Judging by what you wrote, i believe that was the clear message you were trying to get across.  I totally agree with you that texting while driving can be really fatal and it impairs our ability to drive.  No matter how well an individual drives, the road is shared so it doesn't really matter because there are other drivers on the road.  I think the main purpose was to persuade your reader and i think with a bit more organization and more clear support for your argument would have helped.